1) The profile of Nick Esposito had a better lead because it begins by saying your assumptions on someone would be wrong.
2) The angle for the the profile about Codi Mills' was about her love for reading and photography. Nick Esposito's profile was about his interest in classic rock amidst his die-hard baseball family.
3) The profile on Nick Esposito was better. It was more focused and didn't feel as if you were constantly switching between two subjects. It flowed from being not interested in baseball to being interested in classic rock easily. Mills' profile jumped back and forth between her love for reading and photography which was jarring. Her profile did have better usage of quotes between the two.
2) The angle for the the profile about Codi Mills' was about her love for reading and photography. Nick Esposito's profile was about his interest in classic rock amidst his die-hard baseball family.
3) The profile on Nick Esposito was better. It was more focused and didn't feel as if you were constantly switching between two subjects. It flowed from being not interested in baseball to being interested in classic rock easily. Mills' profile jumped back and forth between her love for reading and photography which was jarring. Her profile did have better usage of quotes between the two.
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